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Errant flute scale pierces my reverie.
   As I lift my gaze, numerous scenes capture my attention:

The box-shouldered bartitone
   blots sweat from his brow,
   while brooding
   over the score of his impending solo.

Shine-waxy woodwinds
   (bassoons and clarinets alike)
   catch and hold filmy light,
   as happy tools personify
   glee at their approaching moment.

Balding brass players
   commiserate and conjecture
   as to length of rehearsal this eve
   while they stroke and tune their horns
   with skill and care.

Nimble digits
   pluck taught strings
   joyfully,
   as eyes close in enjoyment
   of wavering melodious strains.

Maestro bent
   with concentrated intent -
       god of chaotic tones that swirl around him -
   rises to full height,
   commanding attention from all.

  
He raises his arms.
Silence falls.


Lustrous lungs of lithe soprano soloist
   expand, then expel
       nirvana's nectar
   in tones tremulous, thrilling,
       tender.

Coppery French horns
       drip viscous harmonies,
   as stale breath pressed forth in effort
   unites in a consonance matching
in intensity of angel-fire streaming.

As fat fingers firmly grip faded scores,
   eyes squint, adjust to stagelights.
Sizable sopranos,
       owners of crass-crude speaking voices
   morph into toy piano-colored
       breathiness incarnate.
   
Yet, out of the clamor of
   crooked and defective lumps of flesh
flies sound that rivals the glory of any heaven in pure brilliance.
          Unknown to all,
       a single, taciturn star
       rests in the tear-filled eye
       of a young hopeful.   
          Dark lashes curl upward,
       revealing unspeakable yearning.
       Stranded, enraptured heart
          bursts for want of music everlasting.
©2006-2009 =anextraordinarygirl
:iconanextraordinarygirl:

Author's Comments

written while sitting in dress rehearsal, as a member of the York Symphony Chorus. I was inspired by chorus and orchestra members alike. and i had about 12 square inches in which to move, so if i didn't occupy my mind with something else i was likely to FREAK out without any space in a huge crowd of people. enjoy.


preview by the lovely and talented :heart::heart:
(yeah, that's my mouth :fear:)


CRITIQUE PLZ! please. please please. kthxbai

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:iconlasciateognesperanza:
Absolutely lovely - taking the passion, power, and poetry of music and transcribing into the written word. Love it. :+fav:

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:iconrandomfilms:
This is great!

I love the way you describe the different sections ... the characters, and their movements, really fit the instruments they play.

The way you build the tension as well is superb, with the middle stanza the ultimate silence before the crescendo

And I love the young hopeful in among the cacophony ... she is the star of the piece.

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:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:thanks: you're so sweet! omg. i think i wrote this one right this time, tho. Like, people are able to see what I intended them to see. :bow: i'm so excited about this. :hug: thanks for your kind words!

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:omfg: :thanks: :hug: thank you SO much. :aww: this poem and the responses like yours have made my WEEK! :w00t:

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconrapidograph:
... so rich, literally dripping with imagery, especially the last stanza... I can't really critique this, because I felt like I was there...

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"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."
— Dr. Seuss
:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:omfg: :thanks: :w00t: bless you, sir. that was my intent. thanks so much!

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconrandomfilms:
:nod: I think you did hun, I think you did :aww:

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:icondrownedkytten:
Breathtaking write.


Nice touch with the literal layout of the poem, visual aids instantly please my mind.

The occasional alliteration and/or assonance are well-received,
as is the sheer. . . -- wholesome quality this piece portrays.


Well done, hon. :aww:




Kat.
:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:omg: THANKS! i do like this one, even tho I was really unsure and indecisive while writing it. wow, i'm bowled over by your praises, since you are such an incredible poet. :thanks: :blush: :hug: thanks for reading it, and i'm glad you like it :)

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong

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