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You’re not my knight in shining armor,
     since I’m not a helpless maid.
You’re not my one and only lover;
     I have loved and lost and strayed.

You are the one my heart has pined for,
     hoped and prayed for all my life.
You are who my lone spirit needs, more
     day and night, in joy or strife.

My love, respect, and care I give you –
     yet, I’m flawed, imperfect, scarred.
Please know with all I am, I’ll be true,
     honest, tender, never hard.

But somehow you see beauty here
     within my worn and tired soul.
I trust you, sir, because I’ve no fear,
     you will keep me safe and whole.

We both are old enough to know that
     life and love can be a mess.
Together with you I’ll endure it,
     ever seeking happiness.
©2006-2009 =anextraordinarygirl
:iconanextraordinarygirl:

Author's Comments

This is my entry for #36 "Precious Treasure" for the 100 Themes Project, as outlined here: [link]

This is another one I did at work, all of last week. Its in iambic octameter, but spread over 2 lines. Meaning, there are 8 feet, but there are only 2 sets of 8 within each stanza of 4 lines. Make sense? Rhyme scheme of A B A B, obviously. Do critique this. I know I need help with some word choices, but I'm working to keep the meter as well, so I'm REAL open to crit to smooth out a few spots.

Dedicated to my love, my everything, Matty. :aww:

(this guy: He also shot the preview :aww:)

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:iconnotmuchofastalker:
Im not much good at advanced critique im afraid, as we have spoken of before, i know nothing but thought.

I really do love the way this rhymes though, it has a nice flow, i like the first verse, stanza, thingo, *grin* best, i think its almost perfect. Well done i say. x
:iconrandomfilms:
:love: words fail me :+fav:

:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

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MAKING THE UGLY BEAUTIFUL THROUGH THE MAGIC OF CELLULOID
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:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:melt: awwww. thanks, you're sweet. glad you like it :hug:

:heart:

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:omfg: wow thanks!!! :faint: glad you like it :aww:

:heart:

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:blowkiss: omg you. I adore you, you know. I have this written out in blue felt tipped pen on a piece of Impressionist statinery for you. Make sure you remind me to give it to you in 27 DAYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :excited: I love you. I'm glad you like this. Thank you for the :+fav: :blowkiss: :hug: :kiss:

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconboy25597:
it kind of reminds me of the one i did about being a beautiful shambles

so sweet

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I’m alive
I’m being born
I just arrived, I’m at the door
Of the place I started out from
And I want back inside
**********************
I am real
A Perfectly imperfect person
A beautiful shambles
Of course you don’t get me
**********************
:iconanextraordinarygirl:
:aww: thanks for reading!

:heart:

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"I'm not gonna say anything inspirational; I'm just gonna fucking swear a lot." Billie Joe Armstrong
:iconboy25597:
no probs

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I’m alive
I’m being born
I just arrived, I’m at the door
Of the place I started out from
And I want back inside
**********************
I am real
A Perfectly imperfect person
A beautiful shambles
Of course you don’t get me
**********************
:iconnursecraft:
My pleasure to read this. It is delicate and tender. The meter meets with perfection. The wording is fine. The only word that possibly doesn't mesh with the rest of it is strife. (But I just don't like that word personally.:blahblah: ) This creates a soft flow and easy movement through the course of the poem. And besides that-you left your guy kind of speechless! :giggle:

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May the Lights of the heavenly Watcher keep sun ever on your face...

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